This is also good. You capture the "falling" image with the lines themselves, and the spacing which gives a sense of the poem "falling." The last word "broken" evokes that last piece that falls onto the ground, maybe uncapitalize it to show how "broken" it really is.
This is also good. You capture the "falling" image with the lines themselves, and the spacing which gives a sense of the poem "falling." The last word "broken" evokes that last piece that falls onto the ground, maybe uncapitalize it to show how "broken" it really is.
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